Writing: LEQ Evidence
WORLD HISTORY PROJECTAP/ LESSON 6.8ACTIVITYWRITING: LEQ EVIDENCE AND REASONING PART 2Unless otherwise noted, this work is licensed under CC BY 4.0. Credit: “Writing: LEQ Evidence and Reasoning Part 2”, OER Project, https://www.oerproject.com/1PurposeAs you did in the last writing activity, you will identify and revise aspects of a student-written essay to improve it. Specifically, you’ll look at the Evidence and Historical Reasoning rows of the WHP LEQ Writing Rubric. As with all the writing progression activities, the goal is to help you improve your writing skills so you are able to clearly communicate your position on different topics. This should also help prepare you for the AP® World History: Modern exam.ProcessHere we go again! In this writing activity, you will again analyze and revise a student essay to improve it. Today, you will be focusing in on the use of evidence and historical reasoning in an essay that was the response to the following prompt: Develop an argument that evaluates the extent to which the effects of the reform movements of the long nineteenth century impacted society on a global scale. As needed, review the criteria for these sections of the rubric with your class.Then, take out the Writing –LEQ Evidence and Historical Reasoning Part 2 worksheet and annotate and revise the essay according to the worksheet instructions. As usual, first find the major claim or thesis statement. Then, look for evidence, note where it could be improved, and revise those areas. Then, grade and comment upon the use of historical reasoning in the essay. Be prepared to share your answers with the class!
WORLD HISTORY PROJECT AP / LESSON 6.8ACTIVITYWRITING: LEQ EVIDENCE AND REASONING PART 22Directions: After reading the essay, follow the steps below.1.Circle the thesis/major claim.2.Pick three locations where evidence could be added or improved upon, put a star() next to those sentences, and write your revisions in the space below.3.Review the essay and determine if the author uses the correct historical reasoning (causation, comparison, or continuity and change over time) to frame and develop an argument that is relevant to the prompt. Provide a score (advanced, proficient, developing, or inadequate) and comments that justify your score.LEQ prompt: Develop an argument that evaluates the extent to which the effects of the reform movements of the long nineteenth century impacted society on a global scale.The mid-to late-eighteenth century was a period of extreme change. In the late seventeenth and early-eighteenth century Enlightenment philosophy contributed to a shift in the ways people viewed the relationship between governments and society. These ideasled to an understanding that humans were more than just subjects of a monarch but rather that natural laws were in place that protectedhumanity from injustice. Ideas such as liberty, equality, and a social contract between governments and their people led to the political revolutions of the long nineteenth century. However, this wasn’t the only revolutionary change that occurred during this period, as significant transformations took place in production and distribution in the mid-eighteenth century with the start of the Industrial Revolution. During this period of factories and machines, the new working class was subject to harsh treatment and labor conditions. However, people, inspired by the political philosophies of the long nineteenth century coupled with concern over these harsh working conditions, began to demand reforms. As a result, these reformers fought for changes regarding not only labor laws, but also for the rights of women and people of color. Social activists sought to reform labor conditions, voting rights, and inequalities experienced by people of color, and they were successful in many of these endeavors; however, equality was never fully achieved and most of their successes were confined to the industrialized world.Before the passage of labor reform laws, those working in the factories and mines worked long hours in unsafe conditions. Reformers essentially strove to create a working environment that not only protected the worker’s life but their democratic rights as well. Social activists demanded an overall improved system, which in turn bettered the lives of the worker and laid the groundwork for future improvements. However, these reformers mainly focused their efforts for improved working conditions for those living in the western world—Europe and North America. Therefore, children and adults working in the colonies of these western nations continued to labor under harshconditions. Reforms in the colonies would not truly be achieved until after independence was won, but even thereafter, child labor, low pay, and unsafe labor conditions remained.
WORLD HISTORY PROJECT AP / LESSON 6.8ACTIVITYWRITING: LEQ EVIDENCE AND REASONING PART 23Western reformers also aimed to extend political rights to more people, which eventually resulted in greater political equality for women. Therefore, women began advocating for their political right to vote. The fight for suffrage was also linked to that of labor. For women and their children who worked in unsafe factories, the only way to achieve change was if women also had a say in the laws that were passed. Both women in the UK and US finally gained the right to vote at the beginning of the twentieth century, which would enable them to make further strides towards gender equality and labor regulations. While suffrage and labor reform were achieved for certain women during this period, full equality including equal pay for equal work was not. Many women continued to work for low wages, in particular minority women in industrialized nations and women living under colonial rule, both of whom faced further obstacles and hardships in the fight for equality.Another reform movement that occurred during the long nineteenth century, and one that was also tied to both labor and women’s rights was that of extending equal rights to people of color. After the political revolutions of this period provided free white men with freedom, liberty, and suffrage, African Americans began to fight for their human rights as well. During the Haitian Revolution, for instance, enslaved Haitians managed to completely overthrow their enslavers, which gradually led to the abolition of slavery in other nations. One of the last western nations to abolish slavery was that of the United States, roughly 60 years after the Haitian Revolution. Despite these successes, slavery continued to exist, albeit illegally in most places. In addition, while many new freedoms were gained after the abolition of slavery in the US, state legislatures found ways to subvert these rights with the passage of Jim Crow laws, poll taxes, and other restrictions to full equality.Nineteenth-century social reformers aimed to extend the rights of freedom and liberty gained during the political revolutions of the eighteenth century. Labor reformers wanted workers to be safe in their workplaces and also receive just compensation for their labor. Political reformers fought for the extension of rights such as suffrage and equality for women and minority groups. Many of these aims were achieved with the passage of labor reform laws, suffrage amendments that included minorities and later women, and the abolition of slavery in most western nations.However, these reforms were mainly achieved in western nations and some were not fully achieved, not even today. Therefore, the reformers of the long nineteenth century were mostly successful in their endeavors but for those who toiled in the colonies or for minorities who lived through segregation, the rights fought for and won by some at the beginning of this long century were not fully realized until much later.
WORLD HISTORY PROJECT AP / LESSON 6.8ACTIVITYWRITING: LEQ EVIDENCE AND REASONING PART 241.Added or revised evidence1:2.Added or revised evidence2:3.Added or revised evidence 3:4.Historical Reasoning score:5.Historical Reasoning comment: